First time I'm reading one of your pieces--congratulations on a very well-written, brilliantly-presented piece of stylish erotica! Excellent series of twists and turns throughout, as Simone Francis indicated--added to the story. It's tastefully done, yet doesn't sacrifice the down-and-dirty intensity required of high-quality writing about sex, whether in erotica, or simply using erotically charged scenes in a conventional piece. Two things were particularly noteworthy. Your MC was a complex character psychologically--a lifelong sexual eavesdropper whose thrills came from her voyeurism to be sure, but to amplify and augment her own fantasies and desires. She's an intensely passionate woman whose heart and soul burn white-hot, a person gifted with a sharp perception to not only visualize what's going on between the lovers she eavesdrops on, but also, in some form, to "feel" it within herself, to put herself there with them (similar to how a good erotica writer is supposed to get the reader red hot I guess). I also really liked this couple--adventurous and uninhibited. Nothing out of bounds, totally comfortable within themselves--into their kinks and accepting of someone "trying to find their way." Sure, they like to watch, but it's all part of the fever pitch, the surreal delirium of this story--back in her room, the MC is literally yearning for them to answer her--to invite her back--she overhears their "loving in the morning"--how beautiful is that! And, unconventionally, like the initiate of a wisdom cult--knocks at the door, and is pulled inside to share the bliss she's discovered: her days of being a spectator are over, perhaps--she's found fulfillment and wholeness via what she perceived to be a behavior that was off-the-wall. Everything about this piece was brilliantly conceived and executed--it clearly took time and thought to construct, and I commend you for it. Highest marks for a splendid job! I've been a subscriber for quite a while, but I'm just now getting around to looking at your work--many apologies!
Thank you so much for such an insightful commentary, it's always a delight when the details I've imbued into the story are recognised by others!
I've always striven to write high-concept erotica, and this story is the result of much thinking, drafting, and ultimately writing. I wanted to write a story that explored what makes objectification erotic, the exchange of agency for attention.
All trades, and indeed all dynamics, have multiple sides. When I realised The Other Side was a metaphor for much more than the sounds behind an neighbouring wall, the remaining pieces of the story fell into place. I am very proud of the final result.
It's very pleasing to know the layers of this story were noticed and appreciated. I've always believed all stories should have a subtext, especially erotic ones, otherwise they're just descriptions of sexual goings-on!
I got totally absorbed in this delicious experience, from the explanatory beginning to the tension of the end. It plays with many emotions and feelings including vulnerability and need but more than this it smacks (excuse the pun) of real deep pleasures only available to those brave enough to play on the edge of things which in turn excite and delight the entire body and soul in a way only those who have been there might truly understand.
Thank you for this very insightful comment. The opening is indeed deliberately misleading, this is not a (just) story about voyeurism, but vulnerability and boldness. So glad you enjoyed it!
First time I'm reading one of your pieces--congratulations on a very well-written, brilliantly-presented piece of stylish erotica! Excellent series of twists and turns throughout, as Simone Francis indicated--added to the story. It's tastefully done, yet doesn't sacrifice the down-and-dirty intensity required of high-quality writing about sex, whether in erotica, or simply using erotically charged scenes in a conventional piece. Two things were particularly noteworthy. Your MC was a complex character psychologically--a lifelong sexual eavesdropper whose thrills came from her voyeurism to be sure, but to amplify and augment her own fantasies and desires. She's an intensely passionate woman whose heart and soul burn white-hot, a person gifted with a sharp perception to not only visualize what's going on between the lovers she eavesdrops on, but also, in some form, to "feel" it within herself, to put herself there with them (similar to how a good erotica writer is supposed to get the reader red hot I guess). I also really liked this couple--adventurous and uninhibited. Nothing out of bounds, totally comfortable within themselves--into their kinks and accepting of someone "trying to find their way." Sure, they like to watch, but it's all part of the fever pitch, the surreal delirium of this story--back in her room, the MC is literally yearning for them to answer her--to invite her back--she overhears their "loving in the morning"--how beautiful is that! And, unconventionally, like the initiate of a wisdom cult--knocks at the door, and is pulled inside to share the bliss she's discovered: her days of being a spectator are over, perhaps--she's found fulfillment and wholeness via what she perceived to be a behavior that was off-the-wall. Everything about this piece was brilliantly conceived and executed--it clearly took time and thought to construct, and I commend you for it. Highest marks for a splendid job! I've been a subscriber for quite a while, but I'm just now getting around to looking at your work--many apologies!
Thank you so much for such an insightful commentary, it's always a delight when the details I've imbued into the story are recognised by others!
I've always striven to write high-concept erotica, and this story is the result of much thinking, drafting, and ultimately writing. I wanted to write a story that explored what makes objectification erotic, the exchange of agency for attention.
All trades, and indeed all dynamics, have multiple sides. When I realised The Other Side was a metaphor for much more than the sounds behind an neighbouring wall, the remaining pieces of the story fell into place. I am very proud of the final result.
I loved this, it was so rich on so many different levels
It's very pleasing to know the layers of this story were noticed and appreciated. I've always believed all stories should have a subtext, especially erotic ones, otherwise they're just descriptions of sexual goings-on!
I got totally absorbed in this delicious experience, from the explanatory beginning to the tension of the end. It plays with many emotions and feelings including vulnerability and need but more than this it smacks (excuse the pun) of real deep pleasures only available to those brave enough to play on the edge of things which in turn excite and delight the entire body and soul in a way only those who have been there might truly understand.
Thank you for this very insightful comment. The opening is indeed deliberately misleading, this is not a (just) story about voyeurism, but vulnerability and boldness. So glad you enjoyed it!
Beautifully told with so many twists and turns.
Thank you so much, praise from a fellow erotic writer is the sweetest praise of all 🙏